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Jun. 15th, 2010 06:44 pmSo for reasons unknown to me, I have been on a crazy sleep schedule where I sleep half the night and then wake up and read my old original fiction until 5 a.m. I'm going to try not to do that tonight. Still, re-reading my stuff taught me much about how my writing has changed through the years, emphasized how incredibly fucked up I made my characters and made me pine to return to it. I actually think I want to return to Psychosis more than I want to work on Heritage. I will never again create a character as epically special as my Dominic. He is my greatest accomplishment. It's sad to know that since I have so many other stories I want to write. But it's just made me moody about not finding time to write again.
I think I'm going to try a short writing exercise of re-writing a passage to cut down on wordiness and make it sharper and make the dialogue not suck.
Things I learned through a re-read of my pairing:
- Lucian cries too damn much. Seriously, he cries every two chapters. That said, he is incredibly violent and punches people regularly.
- Dominic is surprisingly more feminine than Lucian. It's how he views things and what he thinks about. Hint: Lucian thinks about SEX.
- Lucian's co-dependency on Dominic is DEEPLY UNHEALTHY. Yet I love this so it's not changing. But he does forgive Dominic too fast sometimes, considering that Dominic literally tortures him and beats the ever-loving shit out of him. I need to work on that.
- Some of my dialogue reads so scripted that it's painful, especially when characters are hurt.
- Huge chunks of my narration could be cut and not affect the story at all.
- Vincient, Ty and Angelique are all horrible characters.
- I can't write young Dominic to save my life.
- In cataloging all the ways Dominic has hurt Lucian throughout the story I get: hitting, slapping, punching, straining wrist, choking, trying to slit his throat, burning, biting in his wolf form, throwing around, dislocating his arm and trying to shoot in the head. Wow. Dominic is an asshole.
- I need to work better on voice all around. Sometimes they all sound the same.
- Dominic and Lucian continue to be the most fucked-up pairing I have ever written.
I think I'm going to try a short writing exercise of re-writing a passage to cut down on wordiness and make it sharper and make the dialogue not suck.
Things I learned through a re-read of my pairing:
- Lucian cries too damn much. Seriously, he cries every two chapters. That said, he is incredibly violent and punches people regularly.
- Dominic is surprisingly more feminine than Lucian. It's how he views things and what he thinks about. Hint: Lucian thinks about SEX.
- Lucian's co-dependency on Dominic is DEEPLY UNHEALTHY. Yet I love this so it's not changing. But he does forgive Dominic too fast sometimes, considering that Dominic literally tortures him and beats the ever-loving shit out of him. I need to work on that.
- Some of my dialogue reads so scripted that it's painful, especially when characters are hurt.
- Huge chunks of my narration could be cut and not affect the story at all.
- Vincient, Ty and Angelique are all horrible characters.
- I can't write young Dominic to save my life.
- In cataloging all the ways Dominic has hurt Lucian throughout the story I get: hitting, slapping, punching, straining wrist, choking, trying to slit his throat, burning, biting in his wolf form, throwing around, dislocating his arm and trying to shoot in the head. Wow. Dominic is an asshole.
- I need to work better on voice all around. Sometimes they all sound the same.
- Dominic and Lucian continue to be the most fucked-up pairing I have ever written.
